I think you wrote pretty well, but you should make them in paragraphs and you also should focus on transition from a paragraph from the next paragraph. Also, it doesn’t seem like you have introduction and conclusion for this short response. And, you were jumping from one thing to another thing which is confusing. What is worse, is that it supposed to be 300 words or around 300 words, but this response is 733 words, so I think you need to think about cutting it down, maybe make it less detail because this one is too much…Thank you very much.
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